Tasty.

Thanks, I think i should do more Elton John songs, i have already done, Don't go breaking my Heart.

Good job... :D

Good parody.

(Amiright Idol) Another oddball 70s tune I had very little knowledge of. There was one pacing hiccup in the 2nd stanza. This was a cute song, just twisted the meaning of the original a bit. I wish it had been just a bit funnier, I'm not sure how. It was unusual how the ending menu turned into Vietnamese cooking, for sure! Good luck!

Sir, I'm ready Lunch, &here's a bunch of crunching 5's !

(AmIRight Idol) I have a few suggestions for you in this contest. One, turning a couple of words around is kinda cool, however you left many many many words in touch. If I were to record it and play it back to back with the OS, many would think it's a misheard lyrics parody or even a person doing karaoke while trying to guess the words. Perhaps challenge yourself a tad more in that department. This parody was ok on a comedy end, but go for the juggular a bit, try to hit some punch lines. Song choice was ok, but I don't think I could have made this into a recording because even though Elton John is huge--this particular song is not among his hits. . .I believe that this was playing it safe, I can tell from your writing though--you are capable of far more than this.

(Idol) I was hoping to avoid discussing so early into the comp "line shape", i.e., how a line is phrased, syllables stressed, pauses in cadence and internal rhyming. The original has "I'll write a symphony - just for you and me": despite how it may be formatted on a set of lyrics, it's sung as 6 and 5 syllable lines that rhyme with each other. Your substitution of "I'l take your order with glee, for your tea" has to be read as a 7/3 syllable couplet. Though you got the rhymes in that line, the shift of line shape from a 6/5 pair to a 7/3 pair is a very abrupt change, especially in a song with such short lines. Not that it can't be done the way you have it written, it's just not intuitive for the reader or performer who might wind up recording it.

Also, subbing "service" for "love" in the first verse throws that line off enough that it would be worth looking into single syllable words that are synonymous with service, or rewriting the line so that it scans a bit better.

Try singing your lyrics along with the original song: it often doesn't take much to get a line that's off to fall right into place.

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