I actually know a couple of people who got fired for either downloading or distributing pornographic materials on company computers. Most corporations have ZERO tolerance for that stuff.

Can't believe no one did this before.

It's the same with schools. NEVER let a student use your computer! Very funny parody. ;D

The lyric contrasting on this one is downright awesome!! 555

...Say, I'm wondering if the boss you're writing about took said porn for himself. I know how people in charge like to "keep a breast" of the goings-on.

M & P great subject and I sure that many a lusty Knight has been "laid off " due to this here in Siliconned Valley, CA ~ Happy St Pat's ~ to you both !

Um, you did listen to the whole song, right? I mean if you just ran out of ideas, that's fine. The whole verse was already repeated, but still, that's your chance to expand creativity in the song by a significant amount. Outside of it being incomplete though, I'll give you that you kept very well with the pacing. But you're worrying too much about it rhyming exactly the same as the original song, rather than just following the pace. The parody has potential, it could be fairly funny, but due to it being incomplete and the stress over perfect rhyming, it's not as good as it could be. I say keep working on it, and it may turn out pretty decent.

Well, at leat you won't have to worry about sneaking in the NCAA basketball tournament at work.

Innovative and inventive idea, I say. Downloading 5's

@TheCrazyCam: Having sold a parody of TOS to a radio producer and syndicator, I think I know the pacing pretty well. The *only* teensy glitch is:

Racing with the wind
Chasing virt’ul bimbos           ..one syllable over.

The "missing" parts are just ad libs and fades that add nothing to the song. Rhyming the OS is what we call "syllable-matching" here, and is definitely bonus points. In view that, and of over-the-top fave lines like "Bevy sluttal, plundered" and "Stake immured in a smut embrace" (could *you* write those?), the nit is far overshadowed. ROFL 555, without a doubt.

btw, when may we look forward to the pleasure of your parodies that will put ones like this to shame?

(stricty optional) TT's commercial success:
http://www.amiright.com/parody/60s/steppenwolf33.shtml
Radio doesn't care about repeating choruses, which I don't do for songs intended for here.

Oh, my apologies. I didn't really explain what I meant by expanding creativity. Okay, my strategy in a parody is to take a repeated chorus line or verse and change it into something much different than the first time it is used in the original...hard to explain, lol. It might be better if I just show my damn parodies already. :P And I will note the vocabulary used is creative, but it is hit-and-miss, which makes the parody not as good as it could. I honestly hate the fact that you cannot edit your songs once you post them. So Merry & Pippin, just keep working on this, I definitely think you make this parody a lot better. While keeping the vocab in tact, I really hope you try to add more to this by...well, finishing the song. The tactic I mentioned above. Ugh, alright, I'll get to proofreading my parodies. I tend to accidentally type words in the wrong lines, but uh, it'll be quick.

Very funny stuff you two!

he he

Cam is correct - the OS repeats the first two verses and the chorus. When Pippin sent me the words I neglected to check it against the OS. My extensive record collection is 2000 miles away in CA, and I probably won't see it again for 10 years (sigh), and I dumped my Limewire as it was taking up to much space on my ill and aging PC. So it's hard for me to find the OS's to listen to.

Tommy - regarding 'bimbo' vs. 'wind' - it was not a mistake - i did that on purpose. Wind may be one syllable, but in the OS it is sung as wi-ind and dragged out - the two-syllable 'bimbo' fits perfectly into the sound of the song. Sing it and you will see what I mean.

Hmm, I wasn't even talking about that part for pacing mixed with the flow of lyrics, but oh well. Whatever there is to say, lol. Anyway, don't worry bout it Merry, I said it was good, just needs a few more adjustments. I haven't read any of your other parodies, so I've got no idea if this is like child's play compared to your others.

It's okay Cam - I was truly embarrassed that we missed part of the song - will be more careful next time. If you had not pointed it out, it would have gone by us completely, so thank-you.

Re: Your comment to TT about syllable counts... You have, unknowingly, just given me a HUGE bargaining chip in an ongoing debate over pacing. (*Happy Dance*) :D

Merry, YouTube has actual originals (in some cases, 45 rpm) of many oldies.

I anticipated the wi-ind argument. I would have gone along, if the sub were phonemically similar: "been in", "winnin'" etc. However, going from an I to a long O definitely causes a stumble as the reader sings it in head or aloud - OS turns to "window", lol! ;)

"Sing it and you will see what I mean"
Did you think that I did not sing it, and my parody of it, many times before sending it to the producer? They did something very funny with it, stretching out "wand", just as "wind" is stretched out.

FG: Print that out and post it on the wall. Sorry, happy dance time over. (TT does happy flipper flop)

And I see that Merry blamed it on the guy -- as usual for the (un-)fair sex.

btw, you can pace your *own* songs any way you like. Expect to be voted accordingly.

TT, I have unwittingly upset you with my remark above, which really was intended in jest. I am sorry.

@ everyone else: TT is a marvelously talented and expert writer, so I *do* pay heed to his advice and instruction during our collaborative efforts. It has made a noticeable difference in my own writing, and for that I am grateful.

The topic at hand is an interesting point of parody writing with which we all have to wrestle, to a degree. Is the parody form purely visual or partly aural, and to what degree are we free to adapt and/or stretch words and lyrics, and still remain true to the pacing of the OS? There have been several top writers weighing in on that subject over the years in the comment threads, with several different opinions. It *does* make for an interesting discussion.