The first comic touchstone of a song parody is that it "sings" very close to the Original Song (OS) even as it veers off into some completely new direction. This is what we mean by "pace" With that in mind, a few tweeks to improve pace .... "Now I'm a Re-tweeter" for "Now I'm a Believer". When a line in an OS is an iconic earworm, then the sub has to be perfect. Nail the subs for the big lines and you're halfway there .... Second line in OS -- you're about five syllables over. You have to learn "word economy" Your lines dont have to be actual complete sentences -- "Decided to create; follow button's green" John Barry is a master of that ...... 4th line. "Add a profile pic" -- Again you dont need grammatically correct sentences; song lyrics themselves violate all sorts of grammar rules. There are probably a few other tweeks I could point out, but hey ...... One general rule -- if you got some crap lines, make sure they're at the end, people may ignore them if the start was strong. Class dismissed

Kudos, Doc! Refreshing to see constructive criticism amid all the trolls' mindless 1's. I hope you're posting as well as commenting.

not bad, just take Parody Doc's advice, and work on pacing. 433

I try to find a karaoke version on youtube to match my lyrics to when I'm composing. Doesn't always work, but it's a start. I also count syllables on my fingers. With enough time and experience, it will start to get easier.