Great job as always. 555

I really liked this one! I liked it so much that I wanted to sing along, so I replayed it - several times actually - it was that good! I was having a few problems with syllable match. I'll just talk about the first 4 lines: The OS is a straight 11 syllables per line - each line having syllables 1, 4, 6, 8, and 10 stressed. Your parody has 10, 11, 12 and 13 syllables, respectively. Line 1 could be fixed simply by inserting the word "can" to follow OS. I suspect you intended to. Line 2 was flawless. Line 3 needs a syllable ditched, and you have 3 consecutive unstressed syllables after the first syllable stressed. I might have switched out "eagerly" for, say, "keenly." Line 4 is interesting for several reasons. You advance the mood change from Line 5 to Line 4. No problem with the lyric strategy. What you may or may not have noticed is that between Lines 4 and 5, there was a modulation from key of D to key of E-flat that prepares your audience for the mood change. Likely nobody cares, but I thought you'd want to know that. As far as dumping two syllables, goes, perhaps "Then my" are candidates. I don't know. Finally, are you sure you want to end such a sweetly themed song with "horny?" I know, I know it's good for a roaring laugh.... Anyway, good job, and thank you for submitting it.

Thank you for your advice and insight. I appreciate it.